Talk:Eds for Life/@comment-33637326-20140304045347

The pacing and grammar are more than a little off. Here's some advice:

When a new character starts talking, make a new paragraph. Example:

"Assistance, please, assistance!" Edd said at the corner of the rock. Ed and Eddy approached him, he was badly sunburned.

"What's with you? Eddy said.

"Mother nature is soooooo unforgiving." Ed picked Edd up by the arm. "Yowch, don't touch me!" Edd touched his face "Yowch, my face! Every nerve in the primary layers of my skin ar screaming,  'DOUBLE D, YOU NINCOMPOOP YOU FORGOT THE SUNSCREEN!'--Owch!"

Eddy smiled, "You look a little sunburnt there, Double D."

"Don't toy with me, Eddy, I'll be shedding for weeks!"

Eddy said, "Welcome to the Great Outdoors, Nature Boy. What a whiner." Eddy let out a small yelp when he realized he was half burnt. Ed was half butnt as well, though Ed seemed enthusiastic about it.

"I am a lizard, I have become Chameleon Man! OINK!" Ed said.

End example.*

Also, a character's name or nickname should always be capitalized.

From Hot Buttered Ed, writing credits go to Danny Antonucci and Jono Howard.